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Nowadays, people are spending increasingly large amounts of money on their marriage parties. Many people feel large and expensive weddings cause problems for the bride and groom. Do you agree? Use personal examples in your response.

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In recent times, it is observed that the majority of couples or their family members have a dream of extravagant marriage.
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 aspiration can be a quite expensive one. Most people believe that costly weddings lead to problems for the
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. I completely agree with
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 viewpoint. To start with, maintaining social status is one of the key reasons why the money is spent lavishly, which leads to pressure on the
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, my cousin brother had a big fat Indian wedding, which caused him to land in debt, as he was not financially sound as his other relatives.
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 negligence from his end build quite a pressure on his family for
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 five years.
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 lead to constant fights and arguments in their initial stages of their love life. Another reason could be if there are many guests visiting the
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 they could not get a chance to meet the bride and the groom.
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, I once attended a wedding where there were more than one thousand guests and the atmosphere was chaotic. Because of
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 the newlyweds had to spend 8 hours at the reception, just to meet people. It clearly reflects, that humongous weddings can lead to many problems for the
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. In conclusion, to maintain social status and pile the burden on the newlyweds will not be a great idea.
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 big events can
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 lead to more pressure on the family. The above reasons clearly state that there are problems associated with expensive weddings. In future, people may realize that spending exorbitant amount of money is not a good idea, and the penny saved can be put to use in their future.

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