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Violence in the media promote violence in society. To what extent do you agree?

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Globalisation from mouths the advancement of different media. Nowadays, people can access to any type of information and entertainment through a click of a mouse. Some people believe that the violence visualised through the different mediums result
to in
Suggestion
results
human activities in society. To a great extent I agree with
this
 statement.
To begin
 with, young people are attracted to physically challenging activities and media exposure to different fights and stunts bring imitative tendency in them. Nowadays, many youngsters are fascinated by the action movies of their interested celebrity and tries to enact themselves as a same which result violence in public. As an example, Hollywood actor James bond is an action movie actor and many people around the world appreciate his performance and
also
 encouraged to follow a heroic lifestyle like his characters.
Therefore
, if the individuals deeply influenced by these fictional characters, they tend to attack others to get attention and heroic acceptance.
Moreover
, modern, breathtaking advertisements and other type of promotion of different newly featured vehicles through various media
also
 result in the destructive behaviour in individuals
that is
 harmful to the harmony of the society. In the present era, the greatest promotion medium is the creative advertisements which catch the attention of public easily and the several types of vehicle racing ads may
consequently
 produce public traffic violations.
For instance
, most of the car or bike ads are focusing on competitive race
that is
 produce experimentation tendency to the audience that end up in the loss of many lives.
Thus
, violence in various media quickly influence society badly. To conclude, the social activities in the current days are mostly by the influence of various social media and it badly affects the societies harmony through imitation and experimentation tendency.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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