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Some people believe that the internet has brought people closer together by making the world smaller. Others disagree, claiming that the internet has made people and communities more isolated because they no longer need to leave home and interact with others. Discuss both views.

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The
internet
 is an
undividable
impossible to avoid or evade
unavoidable
 part of most people’s lives nowadays. It is the main source that helps us in keeping the bridges with many people, but at the same time
this
 is where the thoughts split. Some people think of it
as of a solution
Suggestion
as a solution
, the others disagree, saying that it is no more than isolation.57 The reason why people find the
internet
 very helpful is obvious. The main one is communication. They do not need to go on long journeys just in order to see, give or show something anymore.
For example
, there is a close relative or a friend of someone, who lives a long way away. They would have to
gone
Suggestion
go
 by horses, cars or planes if they needed to see each other, without any guarantee of success. Now it is much more convenient. It is enough to click the button and you send the picture, see or hear the voice of someone from the other part of the planet.107 When it is about the other group of people, who think of the
internet
 as of a sort of isolation, they find
face-to-face kind
Suggestion
a face-to-face kind
the face-to-face kind
 of communication the best one, regardless of the out coming problems (
such
 as the above-mentioned inconvenience). They believe, that it is much better for every human-being to leave their houses so that they interact with the others, than doing it from their homes. Some of them find it better for health too, especially among the older generation. They claim that the fresh air and the physical activity may prevent many diseases.95 In brief,
although
internet
 cannon be replaced from the modern people’s lives, the points of view are different. While some of them praise the power of technologies, the others are pretty conservative about it. They say it is no more than isolation and people must leave their houses to see their friends or relatives.54

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