It is important to ensure that children with a wide range of abilities and from a variety of social backgrounds mix with each other at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Multiculturalism, mixed
student
from
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of
various socio-economical background and different ability is
common system
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a common system
at
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of
schools in present time. There have advantages and disadvantages of
this
process;
however
, I believe students can
mix
up each other at the school
thus
they
could competition each
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could compete with each
could compete each
other To embark on,
School
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the School
is a miniature version of
adult world
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the adult world
an adult world
.
Mingling
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Mingling students
A mingling student
student
with mixed abilities and backgrounds, prepare students to face the reality of the real world. They will perceive that everyone is unique and different with their own individual strength and weakness,
thus
the children will learn to be accepting other and will be benefited in the future. They will compete each other to achieve their goal and learn how to improve their standard. It
is
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has also developed
is also developing
also develops
also
developed the social skill how to talk with
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
in different situation. As well as, the kid, who has learning difficulties, will be able to profitable from the knowledge
gain
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gained
from
there
of them or themselves
their
classmate.
On the contrary
, Students, who has
equal level
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an equal level
of abilities, the class is more enjoyable and
first
if they put in
same class
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the same class
rather than
mix each other
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mix with each other
. As well as,
teacher
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teachers
a teacher
can use
same method
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the same method
to teach them.
For instance
, if some
student
has less ability to learn lesson
mix
with clever
student
in class, it will slow down the study because teacher repeated lessons for those weak students. As well
as, children are
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, as children are
known to be
cruel and likely tease
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a cruel and likely tease
or bully other classmates who are less fortunate than them. It is
effect
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effectively
negatively both of
assailant
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the assailant
and victim psychologically in
long term
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the long term
. In conclusion, it would be a good idea to
mix
student
without caring of social standard or personal abilities. School, should be a place, where discrimination
are strongly prohibited
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is strongly prohibited
. The children are learning about morality and gain useful knowledge for
future
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the future
.

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