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Writing Samples
Band 8.5

T1 You want to work as a guide for tourists coming to your town. You have heard about a job with a tourism company. Write a letter to the manager of the tourism company. In your letter - say how you heard about the job - Explain why you would be a good tour guide - Ask some questions about the work.

Dear Sir, I am writing to apply for the tour guide position advertised on a local job board. With a degree in tourism management and over three years of experience leading cultural tours in our city, I am eager to contribute my skills to your team. My qualifications make me a strong candidate for
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 role. I possess extensive knowledge of local history and landmarks, and I excel at building rapport with guests. In my previous position, I consistently received positive feedback for tailoring tours to suit various interests and age groups, ensuring an enjoyable experience for all. I would like to inquire about specific aspects of the role. Could you please provide details on the types of tours your company offers, the typical group sizes, and any opportunities for professional development? I would deeply appreciate it if you could consider my candidature. I am enthusiastic about
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. Yours sincerely, Vikas Khanna

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coherence and cohesion
Consider using more varied vocabulary in some places to enhance the richness of your writing.
coherence and cohesion
You might want to ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus, as in the second paragraph, while it is strong, could benefit from slightly clearer transitions between ideas.
task achievement
Your letter has a very friendly and professional tone, which is excellent for this kind of correspondence.
task achievement
You provided strong evidence of your qualifications and experience, making a compelling case for your candidacy.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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