Online education and training is becoming increasing popular in business world. Do the advantage of this outweigh the disadvantage

The given two maps illustrate the possible access
road
to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. The initial difference between the two maps is that roundabouts are added. There is no roundabout in the map of 2007, which makes possible to relocate bus stop and in 2010, it is on the left side of the hospital
road
. The ring
road
around the city hospital is demonstrated in both maps of 2007 and 2010. Whereas, in 2007
car
park
was for both public and staff, in 2010 staff
car
park
and public
car
park
are separated and public
car
park
, and public
car
park
were moved to the side of the ring
road
which is on the right on the map.
However
, the staff
car
park
remained the same location and it is on the right side of the hospital
road
. In 2007 city
road
were joined with hospital
road
with the help of crossroad, while in 2010 crossroad were replaced with a roundabout.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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