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Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

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In the present, the number of social networking users is increasing significantly all around the world because of the advancement of technology. So, some groups of parent start to concern about social networking sites, including Facebook and Twitter for children and said that it has
a
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an
 enormous negative effect on the community and
personal
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personally
.
This
 essay will discuss why I partly agree with the above agreement and provide some of my opinions to support my vision.
To begin
, social networking sites have been destroyed family relationship. In the modern world, Facebook, Instagram, and Line have become more and more popular among every class of people so they would spend their leisure time to surf on social media. Relationship with family would become narrowed
as a result
 of lacking time to spend together. Another impact is an addiction which could occur in every age of human. Most of student waste around 4 hours in front of computer and mobile phone to surf Facebook every day so student would lost attention to study.
For example
, a student could not perform their best for the exam because they spend more time online
instead
 of studying.
However
, social networking sites are
also
 given a huge beneficial effect to both. There are some families which one of them need to live far away to each other,
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such such
 as studying abroad, running a business in foreign countries. A family could keep in touch and update through like Line and What Apps. To sum up.Social media has become an important part in our daily life. Social media make some group of people become closer even as they live on the other side of the world.
Nevertheless
, people could get into the trap if they use in the wrong way.
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