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Artificial Intelligence will soon replace teachers in the classroom. Do you agree with this statement?

#intelligence #teachers #classroom
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Artificial intelligence plays a significant role in the new tech world. I totally agree with The statement that, soon
robotics
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 will replace
teachers
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 in the classroom. With the
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 I can mention that.  
Through automation
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 will make
a dramatic changes
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dramatic changes
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 in all areas
especially
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 in
robotics
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. They can easily do all the activities that a man does. Even they can talk, smell, and
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 that a normal man can do.
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, one of the
robot
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 named
Ms.
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 Sophia is very knowledgeable and
by
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 seeing her performance Saudi Gvt has awarded Saudi Citizenship to her. She takes webinar classes
to
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students
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in
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 most
of
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the
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universities. Nowadays
robotics
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,
automation
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and automation
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is
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are
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 widely used in phone Mobile companies. By the use of
Robotics
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, we can easily identify the names of unknown plants, animals,
birds
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and birds
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 etc., For teaching purposes
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,
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we can use
Robotics
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 automation. Now all the classrooms are changing to SMART rooms. The conventional teaching methods changed to new technological methods. There is no need
of
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 any
teachers
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 inside the Classroom. Actually, there were some limitations for
teachers
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 to teach. They can teach the
students
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 as per the syllabus. They might not have the skill,
knowledge
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or knowledge
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 and discuss innovative ideas with
students
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.
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, even
a
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student
asked
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asks
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 about any doubt
mostly
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most
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teacher
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teachers
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 will say that's out of
syllabus
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the syllabus
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 or will say
about
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it about
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 tomorrow after checking it in the library. That means
teachers
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' knowledge
have
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 certain limits. Even though we will get answers through
internet
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the internet
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 for all questions under the sky. All
students
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 can study a wide range of the spectrum. Within a
microsecond
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 the
students
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 will get solutions to their questions. Through the SMART
class
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class,
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students
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becomes
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 more intelligent, brighter and more competent too. These
students
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 bring new innovative ideas and discover new technologies which will lead the world
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 a new height. As I discussed above, it's soon clear that the
teachers
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 will be replaced by
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robotics
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 machinery.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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