You eat in your college cafeteria everyday lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter,  explain what you like about the cafeteria  say what is wrong with it  suggest how it could be improved

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Dear Sir, I am writing

this

letter in order to express my concern regarding an urgent amelioration in our

college

cafe.

Therefore

, I would really like to request you to kindly publish an article in our

college

magazine in your following publication. I must say that I extremely adore

this

great place. I often go to the cafeteria

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my lunch break with my bosom friends, and I personally love all the cuisines, which they have on their menu. In fact, I have been visiting

this

popular cafe since I joined

this

prestigious

college

. All the chefs, who prepare the dishes, are

well- mannered

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, and they timely serve us food.

Moreover

, it is a fully- hygienic place with an

extra-ordinary

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interior.

Although

I prefer to dine out at our

college

eatery, its prices are tremendously exorbitant. Some students, including me, are unable to afford them. I know that everybody would

also

agree with me.

This

hangout place offers some of its food items at a very higher rate as compared to other eating places.

Thus

, the authorities need to be scale down their

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sky-rocketing

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sky- rocketing

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prices, so that every student could afford

accordingly

. Would you mind publishing

this

serious matter? I would deeply appreciate

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it if

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you could do

this

on the behalf of all the students. If you do

this

, the management would think about to considerably reduce their hefty charges. Hoping to

hearing

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from you soon. Yours faithfully, Jasmeet Kaur

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