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Although more and more people get the news on internet, the newspaper will be important in the future. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days some
newspaper
 companies have to close because of
internet
 advancement while some companies have to transform into online businesses.
Therefore
,
this
 essay totally disagrees with
this
 statement.
Moreover
,
this
 essay will discuss why some people turn to read
newspaper
 on
internet
Suggestion
the internet
.
Firstly
, reading news on the
internet
 is convenience and more flexibility. Nowadays people are not necessary to go to a shop and buy a
newspaper
 before going to work, they just read the news on their mobile phones.
In addition
, reading newspapers is not environment friendly. Not only people have to spend money on newspapers every day, but
also
 an effect on the ecosystem due to
newspaper
 manufacturing.
As a result
, many
newspaper
 companies turn to focus on making news on the
internet
.
For example
, BBC News which is the biggest news company in the UK has created a website and an application for mobile phones. They choose to spread online information. It is because they realized many people don't read newspapers anymore. On top of that, people who are the BBC News's follower receive information faster than reading newspapers.
On the other hand
, there are some elderly people who still read newspapers. Perhaps, those people are not familiar with using electronic devices. It makes those people still look for a
newspaper
Accept comma addition
newspaper, although
although
 there are fewer newspapers these days.
As a result
, there are still some companies which are producing newspapers, and newspapers are still important for elderly people. In conclusion,
Although
 older people still read newspapers, newspapers would be unnecessary things for people in the future.
Thus
, it would be more convenient and better for our environment, if all people turned to use online platform for getting the information.
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