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Prisons are an expensive way of making bad people worse’ To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Crime rates are increasing rapidly among many countries around the world. Some groups of people believe that it takes too much expense to imprison the criminals and
also
 it makes bad people worse. I totally disagree
to
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with
 the topic and express my views below On the
first
 hand, it is the duty of the government to carry out expenditure of the country properly to execute each and every department. Various sectors like hospitals, educational institutes even jails require a certain amount of money for its working. Prisoners are not treated with five star luxury items
such
 as air conditioner rooms or well
hygiene food
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hygiene, food
, they are given very simple rooms with simple food only.
Besides
, some prisons
also
 make them work to earn from them
such
 as the
sabarmati
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Sabarmati
 jail in
ahmedabad
largest city in the state of Gujarat in India
Ahmedabad
 gets
work
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the work
 done by
prisoners
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the prisoners
 at food stalls.
On the other hand
, it is observed that the majority of criminals commit crime
coincidently
, they are not the professional criminals. The situation or the incidence occurs in
such
 a way that they are unable to handle the situation for which they have bare the loss of certain golden days of their life behind the bars.
Although
 because of few professional criminals, many normal prisoners face problems till their lifetime. To conclude, despite giving hard punishments to occasional criminals, the government should focus more on professionals and
also
 prisons should treat criminals as a human being rather than be harsh with them.

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