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Band 6

Modern technology now allows rapid and uncontrolled access to and exchange of information. Far from being beneficial, this is a danger to our societies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is undoubtedly that with the rapid development of modern
technology
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, people are given the opportunities to approach and exchange
information
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. Despite those benefits, some people argue that the
technology
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 is
danger
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a danger
 to our societies. While I accept
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 point of view, I still believe that the advantages are outweigh the negative issues it brought us in today's digital age. On the one hand, there are some reasons why some people consider that the development of
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 has a negative impact on our society.
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, modern
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 helps fake news easily spread quickly, causing problems affecting society. With just one smart device connected to the network, anyone can distribute and receive
information
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 without a choice, whether it's right or wrong.
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, many UK 5G network stations have been burned by citizens, due to fake
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 circulating
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in
 social media that those stations were sources of corona virus infection.
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, frequently visiting unknown websites can put users at higher risk of network attacks. Frauds can access and steal personal
information
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 for malicious purposes.
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, the development of
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 has changed our lives for the better. Apparently, attributed to
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, we are able to keep ourselves
update
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updated
 with the current affairs all around the world because it makes a great contribution to search for a wide range of
information
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. Now,
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 of having to search for
information
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 in books or read every newspaper, with just a few taps on electronic devices, we can find what we need.
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,
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 has already transformed the way people work in a variety fields. It enables telecommuting and teleconferencing, whereby people can work from home and participate in online meetings. Especially during the corona virus outbreak, the fact that people stay home and use
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 applications to study and work has helped reduce the spread of the virus in the community. In
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concluding
, the harm that
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 brings is inevitable by the duality of everything.
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, we can absolutely control its drawbacks and use
technology
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 in the most beneficial way.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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