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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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 has become apparent in recent years that beginning to teach an international
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 at the elementary
school
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 is more efficient than at the middle
school
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.
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Is
 an issue that great amount of specialists feel strongly about. For me it is obvious that starting learning from the younger age allows more opportunities as the several benefits of yearly years. The arguments both supporting and contradicting will be evaluated in
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Firstly
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, as younger the
child
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 is as better his memory is, which offers a big advantage of memorizing new words and expressions in general. Junior brain receives information much
briskly
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more briskly
 through the listening or even the visual content has a significant impact on the retaining.
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, parents are testing the method of teaching by the cartoons from the birth,
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 the little one is
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growing
 up knowing several languages as they are extremely primitive during the childhood.
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, the human being at the any age needs an inspiration and the toddlers are not the exception.
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, I believe that the
child
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 will be encouraged to skill.
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 to
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the ability
an ability
 of recollecting clearly young aged pupils have
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predominated
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More
 spare time.
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Furthermore pressure
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Furthermore, pressure
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 is negligible
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 to secondary
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 students who experience more force to do
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the job
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 time.
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, parents try to
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make
 their children take a place in a huge number of extracurricular activities,
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 offspring even disable to finish homework. Despite
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child
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 has a great number of unoccupied hours that can be devoted to learning languages. One the other hand, age of primary
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 is not the perfect stage of
skilling
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 another
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 as the return takes its toll, which creates a
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 barrier. Even though deficit of fluency is a common issue among all ages. Any balanced view must take into account there alternative factors. From what has been discussed one can reach a conclusion that the success of children on recalling languages depends on two factors
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a remembrance
 and having free time,
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child
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 has problems with speaking
language
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 briefly.
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, It has been my long belief that studying languages in primary
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 or from the birth is the best option for
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 skills at native
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speaker
speaker's
 level.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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