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A country becomes more interesting and develops more quickly when its population includes a mixture of nationalities To what extent do you agree or disagree

#country #population #mixture #nationalities
Country
 development is
a
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an
 important factor, if we grow
up our
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up, our
country it
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country, it
 is giving
benefiest
financial assistance in time of need
benefits
benefit
 to all people which is living in the
country
. Mixture of population in the one
country
is give
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gives
 quick
growth
 as well as interesting life.
This
eassy
an analytic or interpretive literary composition
essay
 will discuss on how different culture of people gives
development
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development, growth
growth
 and to give changes on people life. In the world there are many counties are present and individual homey has their own nationality. If all people coming in one rustic and providing their culture which is good. All homey
have
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has
 merits and demerits. To combine all factors and take good thinks about that through that we can grow our bucolic.
Also people
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Also, people
 are bored to follow one rule they
also
 want to try new thinks. In other terms in some bucolic peoples are narrow minded, so giving other people thought we make changes in their mind. Like in India in some state they follow old tradition, to do marriage in small age and they did not give importance to education. Because of mixture nationality, we can change their mentality.
Also
 other rustic gives attention to sports and others thinks. We can exchange idea and grow our homey. We take their ideas to grow technology as well. To a mixture of
nationally
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nationalities
 give us fabulous
growth
. In opposite side some people forgot their culture and follow the bad thinks, which is bad for
country
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the country
a country
. People want to enjoy their life, they did not think about the future. Sometime follow all nationalities are difficult, because all homey have their own rules and regulations. Overall mixtures of nationality
is
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are
 good if people take good thinks for rustic development and make their
growth
 interested and enjoyable. But some people take wrong way it is harmful for all people.
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