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OBESITY IN AN INCREASING HEALTH PROBLEM IN SOME PARTS OF THE WORLD

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Several ca
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an occurrence of something
cases
ead to obesity in these days. It can be a result from a ch
ronical h
marked by a tendency to find and call attention to errors and flaws
critical
chemical
ealth issue to a poor diet. When the main reason is the dreadful eating, I believe that the overweight problem can be resolved more uncomplicated.
Therefore
, in
this
 essay I will present some thoughts ab
out those both v
Suggestion
about both those
iews which perhaps can help who is going through
this
 matter.
First
, a variety of ill health can bring with it obesity as one of co
nsequences,
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consequence
for example
, hormonal imbalance and glandular illness. Fo
r
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In
this
 scenario, as far as I am concerned, the principal treatment should be the medical one. To put it another way, the person who has some of those pr
oblem m
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problems
ust seek a right medical assistance to have a correct prescription about what and how to do something to solve
this
 question which interferes in myriad aspects of human being’s life.
On the other hand
, extreme weight gain can be due to a non-healthy nourishment which I consider being the main reason in nowadays because the consumption of a large amount of frozen and fast food.
This
 happens, in my views, by virtue of the days are full of activities in
this
 modern wo
rld
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world, therefore
therefore
, individuals do not have much time to prepare an ideal nutrition to remain a wholesome life and end up becoming fat. To conclude, obesity is caused by many issues and can affect the self-esteem, as well as resulting in other serious diseases,
such
 as heart attack. Who suffers with
this
 must take care better of yourself, following guidelines provided by a co
rrect s
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corrections
correctional
pecialist, along with attempting to include more vegetables and others fresh and nutritive al
iments i
violent or severe weather (viewed as caused by the action of the four elements)
elements
n the their daily routine.

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