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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

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In the past, when students used to apply for university degrees or any other higher degree courses, they used to prefer the institutions of their own province for
this
 purpose, but as the time passed
,
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,
 a new trend of studying abroad has been seen from
last
 2 or 3 decades, specifically in the
last
 7 to 8 years. There are both advantages and the disadvantages of
this
 development. To commence with, everybody wants to get
education
Suggestion
an education
 from a good and well reputed university. So, most of the students apply to the prestigious institutions in order to receive knowledge from renowned faculty.
Secondly students
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Secondly, students
 get the experience of living and studying with the people from different cultures.
As a result
, students gain information in many ways.
Moreover
, the developed countries provide
chance
Suggestion
a chance
 to the students to earn while learning, which makes them self-dependent. According to a research, the students who study and work in different countries, can adapt any type of working environment. On the flip side, there are many students who intend to work and settle in the same country where they finish their
universities
Suggestion
university
 degrees because they get bedazzled with the
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
 of that place and the good perks offered to them by employers.
However
,
this
 development is not good for their home country
also
, since their native land face loss of valuable human resource. To encapsulate, studying abroad can be good from the perspective of an individual as it helps them to be knowledgeable, prosperous and wealthy. But from the view of a nation,
this
 development could be regressive for their homelands.
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