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dicuss the advantages and disadvantages on social distacing

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In these days and ages, social distancing has a great influence on teenagers.
To begin
 with, students have to study at home through some apps, like: Zoom, Microsoft Team and so on, which have advantages and disadvantageous effect on teens.
Firstly
, when studying, sometimes students do not keep up with the lessons.
However
, students can take a record of what teachers are saying and have some screenshots in order to see them after the lesson.
Secondly
, studying a lot through the internet can have
bad effect
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a bad effect
 on the students. Nowadays,
students, especially who
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especially students, who
 are in grade 9 and 12, have to take plentiful of extra courses.
Consequently
, staring at the computer for
long time
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a long time
 can make them shortsighted and have some headache.
Moreover
, social distancing means that students must not go outside.
This
 will give them the opportunity to do something they like,
such
 as reading and to help their parents with the housework.
Besides
, students cannot meet friends, play sports and have to sit too much, which results in reducing the relationships, have some diseases, like tiredness and boredom. In conclusion, social distancing can have some good and bad effects on teenagers.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • promotes
  • public health
  • infectious diseases
  • encourages
  • digital literacy
  • innovation
  • environmental impact
  • consumption
  • facilitates
  • personal growth
  • self-reflection
  • isolation
  • mental health issues
  • disrupts
  • economic activity
  • service industry
  • exacerbates
  • educational inequalities
  • access to technology
  • cultural
  • social experiences
  • community bonding
  • physical health
  • exercise
  • outdoor activities
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