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University students are increasingly studying abroad as part of their studies. Do the advantages of studying abroad outweigh the disadvantages?

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Studying abroad has become increasingly popular among students.
Although
is
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being
 is tremendously expensive when compared to learning in their own countries, it would give a far wider choice of career prospect
besides
 getting exposed to different cultures. In my opinion, studying overseas is far more advantageous in
long run
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the long run
 despite of some challenges that they will inevitably face. The greatest benefits of learning in a different
countries
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country
is
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are
 that students will have opportunities to broaden their knowledge.
These
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This
 knowledge would have been
otherwise
 impossible to achieve if they had studied only in their own countries. From my own experience, in a seminar hold by Ho Chi Minh University of Technology, many chief executive officers encouraged students to continue their studies in Europe or the Us. These people claimed that studying
in famous institution
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the infamous institution
infamous institution
 around the world would help you to keep up with state-of-the-art technologies.
In addition
, the other advantage of
study
 abroad is gaining life experience. Being in another country requires people to push themselves beyond the norm into
unusually difficult challenge
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the unusually difficult challenge
an unusually difficult challenge
.
However
, it is extremely costly when
study
 in the developed countries. Living expense and tuition fees are noticeably higher when compared to its in the developing countries.
For instance
, Harvard University estimated that the average expense of studying would cost around 32000
dollar
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dollars
 in 2017 while in Vietnam, the total cost of
study
 and living is around 3000
dollar
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dollars
 annually. Not only students have to deal with financing problem, but
also
 the challenge of
new environment
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a new environment
the new environment
new environments
. 30% of students studying abroad admit that they
can not
can not
cannot
 cope with the changes in their lifestyles.
This
 fact indicates that surpassing linguistic and cultural barriers is not a trivial task. Tackling these disadvantages required only a strong
commitments
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commitment
 to deal with all challenges will come. After all the hardship in
study
 oversea, all the efforts will bear
fruits
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fruit
 not only in one ‘s knowledge but
also
 in personal growth. In conclusion, the benefits of studying
benefits
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the benefits
 of
study
 abroad
is far outweigh
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far outweigh
have far outweighed
 the disadvantages.

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