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Some people prefer to directly help people who need it in the local community; however, others prefer to give money to the national or international charities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #community #money #charities
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It is usually happened that
few
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little
 amount of nation think that directly Hill is better that Who need it
on the other hand
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 a group of community like to send their
money
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 to the international
charity
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 side who
promote
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promotes
 straight help line they maybe think It's better than donate
money
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 to the Charities. They may think if they don't give their
money
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 directly it may take more time to reach
to
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for
 them who need it more or should not be going to the right person.As like if they give it a international
charity
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then
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 the
charity
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 go for finding who need the help and
then
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 they will give it and In some other Cases they don't find the right person who need it
Secondly
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 there have some people who think provide their
money
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 to
charity
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 it may be more effective as like they probably think If they provide
money
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 to
charity
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 and like Them if Other people
also
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 give their
money
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 to the
charity
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then
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 the
charity
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 people gather all the
money
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 and
then
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 when it turned to a big amount
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 They can help more than that a normal person do In my point of view I think directly help is much better than giving
money
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 to the
charity
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 because unfortunately some time it will become a corrupt place so that normal people who need really help he or she don't get the help.
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