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Some people prefer to directly help people who need it in the local community; however, others prefer to give money to the national or international charities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #community #money #charities
It is usually happened that
few
Suggestion
little
 amount of nation think that directly Hill is better that Who need it
on the other hand
 a group of community like to send their
money
 to the international
charity
First
 side who
promote
Suggestion
promotes
 straight help line they maybe think It's better than donate
money
 to the Charities. They may think if they don't give their
money
 directly it may take more time to reach
to
Suggestion
for
 them who need it more or should not be going to the right person.As like if they give it a international
charity
then
 the
charity
 go for finding who need the help and
then
 they will give it and In some other Cases they don't find the right person who need it
Secondly
 there have some people who think provide their
money
 to
charity
 it may be more effective as like they probably think If they provide
money
 to
charity
 and like Them if Other people
also
 give their
money
 to the
charity
then
 the
charity
 people gather all the
money
 and
then
 when it turned to a big amount
Then
 They can help more than that a normal person do In my point of view I think directly help is much better than giving
money
 to the
charity
 because unfortunately some time it will become a corrupt place so that normal people who need really help he or she don't get the help.
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