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You have organized a 90th birthday party for your relatives and invited elderly guests. It was a successful party. Write a letter to hotel manager to provide the feedback. When the party took place. Why it was successful. Thank a staff member who was really helpful.

Dear Mr. Moeyaert, I am writing to express my gratitude for hosting a wonderful birthday
party
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 for my maternal grandfather. The
party
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 took place on July 20th, 2025, in the
party
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 hall of your restaurant. Everyone enjoyed the occasion. The
party
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 was a great success.
Firstly
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, the decoration was just amazing, and it
completey
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completely
 aligns with the theme of
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party
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the party
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which
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, which
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 was early 1800s Bollywood.
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, the ambience of the place and the food served were the highlight of the whole evening.
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, the chef paid great attention
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 preparing food, and was considerate about the age of people attending the birthday
party
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. The food was easy to digest and was not oily at all. All the staff members were really helpful. They did a great job as old people need more attention and care as compared to adults; they were always on
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 to lend help. I have never seen
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 a supportive staff anywhere else. I
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assume
you
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apply
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that going forward we will be hosting all the parties in your restaurant. Once
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again,
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 thank you so much for giving my grandfather the best 90th birthday ever. Yours sincerely, Simranpreet Kaur

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coherence and cohesion
Try to use clearer topic sentences to guide each paragraph's main idea.
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Include more specific details about the service provided during the party for added context.
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The letter has a polite and positive tone, expressing appreciation well.
coherence and cohesion
The structure is clear with a good greeting and closing.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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