In many countries small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Almost in each country the wage given for employee is divergent because of
responsibilities
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the responsibilities
of their work.
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Therefore some
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Therefore, some
people insist that the salary ought not to be overrated thereby it has to be limited for each worker, while I claiming that it would not bring expected aftermath opt out from their opinion. In fact, in lots of countries around the world some capable people earn considerable amount of money.
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However there
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However, there
is some truth in people's opinion about levelling the fee, thereby balancing the degree of labours. Take the
company
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"Italian pasta" as an example,
this
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company
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does not provide more payment above the level and workers are really glad with it. Meanwhile, providing equal salary helps to employees do their job with a great solidarity and with no disagreement between them. From
this
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prospect
this
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is quite agreeable option for both employees and employers.
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, balancing the wages to
certain level
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certain levels
can lead to lack of competence among labour which is remarkable in the work process.
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, the one who knows that there is
particular triumph
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a particular triumph
for done job tries by heart in order to accomplish it and triggering
such
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change can lead the organisation to the quit of competent workers.
For example
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, if a particular
companycompany
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pays equal wages for both inept and capable employers the capable people will leave the job because
they
of them or themselves
their
own top service to provide but
shortfall
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a shortfall
of money enquires them to
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company
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companies
that will pay more. There is another minus version for an organisation, it is the default of the responsibility, people who know that they will get the same amount they would not try to progress performing their work sloppily. In conclusion, all the above cited factors
reflects
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reflect
that there would not be noteworthy achievement from levelling salaries. And I would recommend to not let
this
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action come true which will seriously affect the
company
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's growth.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • incentivize
  • discrepancy
  • inequality
  • social cohesion
  • equitable distribution
  • wealth concentration
  • talent retention
  • global competitiveness
  • social unrest
  • innovate
  • government intervention
  • salary cap
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