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Many people keep dogs and cats as companions. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of pet ownership for the animals involved and the community as a whole

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There are several reasons why having a
cat
 is better than having a
dog
 as a pet.
To begin
 with, it is not difficult to have a
cat
, because it is easy to look after a
cat
. A
cat
 has a little impact on the owner’s lifestyle. It is quite
beneficial especially
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beneficial, especially
 for people who have a hectic life and need to deal with many other things.
Moreover
, a
cat
 can stay alone at home for a long time.
However
, a
dog
 is cannot stay alone long, and demands concern from its owner all the time.
Therefore
, it is not easy to look after a
dog
.
Secondly
, it is more economical to have a
cat
. A
cat
 can be fed ordinary food
such
 as vegetable, fruit, pasta, cheese, egg, and so on.
Moreover
, a
cat
 rarely gets sick and needs to be vaccinated no more than once a year. So, a
cat
’s food and health care don’t cost very much.
On the other hand
, a
dog
 demands a variety of
food especially
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food, especially
 protein-weighed like meat, chicken, fish, and so on.
Also
, a
dog
's health care needs to be done often.
Therefore
, it is expensive to have a
dog
 for
people especially
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people, especially
 people whose economic situation isn’t good. In conclusion, cats are more suitable than dogs as a pet due to their easy care and small-scale needs.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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