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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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No one can deny the fact that many people are of the view that unpaid charity programmes should be included in tertiary education in spite of the contradictory opinions that other people may bear. In my opinion, I strongly agree with
this
 view as it will allow youngsters gain invaluable social skills and to help the community.
To begin
 with, working in charity gives undergraduates essential skills that they need when they join with the industry after passing out from universities.
This
 means, when these youngsters engage in these types of programmes, they are able to learn how to work with people and identify ideal solutions for the problems which may arise while working. Many state universities in Sri Lanka,
for instance
, have included optional endowment modules in the academic programme so that interested students could subscribe. Teachers in these institutions claim that the followers of these activities often show a good commitment to work compared to others when they join the industry.
In addition
,
this
 phenomenon will be beneficial for children who are not able to afford money for their tuition fees.
In other words
, these juveniles have the opportunity to learn the subject matters without paying for people who are experts on these subjects.
Besides
,
this
 will pave the way for all children in society to explore the horizons of education.
For example
, it is proven that many adolescents in Tamilnadu are not able to attend to a school owing to burning problems
such
 as poverty.
Therefore
, the addition of these kinds of charitable works for university modules will be a great relief for some children in the community. In conclusion, I think, the inclusion of community services to high school programmes will allow students to get required skills which may shine them once they pass out from colleges, and
this
 will
also
 be helpful to a certain part of the public to gain knowledge without monetary barriers.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compulsory
  • high school programmes
  • unpaid community service
  • charity
  • improving the neighbourhood
  • teaching sports
  • sense of responsibility
  • empathy
  • broader perspective
  • societal issues
  • college applications
  • job applications
  • positive impact
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