IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6.5

Tourists hardly visit museums in most of the countries. What could be the probable reasons, what steps should be taken by the government to attract more tourist.

#tourists #visit #museums #countries #steps #government #tourist
Museums, plays a crucial role in ancient time for learning, creativity and get knowledge about history. But in the majority of the countries tourists barely pay a
visit
 to the museums. As far as I know, visiting art galleries and museums become an old trend, especially for youngsters. The reason behind
this
 is that people can easily have an access to arts of artists, museum information through the internet or television by staying at home.
This
 trend could be changed by implementing some strategies. Tourists who
visit
 other countries to explore and gain a new experience and knowledge about the new culture, religion and the environment can laboriously
visit
 museums. The tendency to
visit
 museums is gradually dropping off tourists, due to they feel that it is a waste of time
instead
 of that they prefer to explore the beautiful outdoor experience of life in cities. And
also
 the information regarding museums, arts, galleries are easily available on the internet and social media.
This
 is the major reason for lacking of interest by tourist to
visit
 museums in most of the countries. To improve
this
 situation some steps required to consider
such
 as government should encourage individuals for visiting museums by reducing prices and should prepare the infrastructure of museum attractions. Schools and universities should often take their students to the museum as a way of teaching. So the students and people should be aware about the fundamental significance of museums and they explore it.
For example
, if a student
visit
 any country or other place he give priority to
visit
 museums, if they have experienced in his life before. In conclusion, visiting museums and art galleries is not a priority of individuals as other kind of places are preferred by them and
also
 the information available on the internet.
However
, collective actions could be taken to rise the visitors or tourists to
visit
 museums and experience it as well.
Submitted by gurbaani121996 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: