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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

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It is argued that rapidly increase in car ownership over the past thirty years has resulted in
traffic
 jam in urban areas. I think there are a number of ways to deal with
this
 issue. Many big cities in the world have
traffic
 problems, but these problems vary.
For example
, It is reasonably easy to drive around my city after 09.00am and before 05.00pm.
However
, outside these hours, it takes two times more to reach your destination. In some other cities,
traffic
 is congested at all times. Having so many cars in cities
also lead
Suggestion
also leads
 to lack of car parking. One of the best approaches governments should can take in busy cities is encourage the of
use
Suggestion
using
 public transport.
This
 means that if more and more people
use
 public
traffic
, there will be less
traffic
 congestion.
Moreover
, public transport facilities must be well run and people must be able to afford them. Buses, trams and subways are good ways of transportation, and if they are cheap and reliable, people will
use
 them. Another approach is to discourage people from entering the city centre by building car parks and shopping centres outside of the cities. Many cities around the world do
this
 successfully and offer passenger bus transport into the centre, if they need it. At rush hours, government can
also
 run a campaign to encourage people to be less dependent on their cars. Usually, many people
use
 their cars for short journeys to go to the supermarkets or local school. There are unnecessary, but we automatically get in our cars without thinking. Clearly we all have a responsibility to look after our cities, but the biggest responsibility is on the governments. Governments can do a lot to improve the situation and part of what they should do involve encouraging individuals to consider alternatives to driving.
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