The number of older people is increasing. Some people think that this will cause problems in their countries; others believe this group is important to society. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Aging is natural in the
life
on
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of
human being
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a human being
. Many countries take policies to keep their population in
god
benefit
good
health as long as possible. The
development
of Medicine increase the
life
of humans,
then
many people across the world can get strong and long
life
. Some people think that
this
fact could reduce the resources for the coming generation, but others think that it can be very important for us to build a strong society. After
analyze
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analysing
analyse
these two versions, we will give our point of view. The increasing of the older people can provoke some issues on demographics stabilization and in the management of financial resources.
Firstly
, the increasing of order people could cause
problem
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a problem
problems
for the
government
to drain some grant and founds to strategical plan for the
development
of
strategical
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strategic
field.
Such
as education, intelligence and infrastructures. In fact, view the high number of older people the governments are
oblige
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obligated
obliged
to take
care
of them, by creating particular infrastructures and assign Doctors and Nurses to take
care
of them.
Then if
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Then, if
the number of older people is constantly increasing, the
government
will be
oblige
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obliged
obligated
to assign
consequent
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consequences
, considerable financial resources. These resources could be assigned to educational or industry sectors.
Secondly
, in
one
country if the older peoples increased and we have a baby boom (an increasing of births) the
government
will be face of serious demographic issues.
This
increasing all the population will oblige the
government
to increase the public incomes.
This
could lead to augment the taxes. The older people could not work as the
youngers
used of the younger of two persons of the same name especially used to distinguish a son from his father
younger
one
.
Then
, those who work will be imposed to take
care
of older persons. In a different
mind spirit
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mind, spirit
, some people think that the increasing of older people is important for a society. We can understand them in tree points.
First
, it is very natural to keep a population healthier.
This
is what which makes us human. It is the core root of human being. In Africa,
one
quote says that “if you want to
kwon
be cognizant or aware of a fact or a specific piece of information; possess knowledge or information about
know
the humanity of on
nation
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the nation
, look if they take
care
of the older people”.
Second
, the increasing of older people
means
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mean
that the health
policies
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policy
works.
That is
an important indicator for a good
development
. In Africa, we consider that older people can be
consider
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considered
as a library. The
last
but not the least, we need older people to teach wisdom to the coming generation. Older people have lived
life
experiences, which
can be teach
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can be taught
to young people.
Then
they will be prepared to tackle the challenges of their generation We deeply believed that, the increasing of
the older
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older
people is a good signal of human
development
. Even if, certain issues
such
demographic and financial restrictions could
occurred
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occur
, some solutions can be used to
fixe
restore by replacing a part or putting together what is torn or broken
fix
them. Legal immigration of young people is
one
of the solutions. People will naturally pass away.
Therefore
, we do not have to stress ourselves on the availability of resources. Cooperation between nation and fair trade could be the strongest solutions to overcome the problems caused by the increasing of older people.
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