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You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Wtire a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter - describe what you enjoyed about the course - say how much cookery you have done since the course - suggest another cookery course you would like the school to offer

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing with regard to a course that I have had recently. The idea of just 2 weeks a new cuisine form a new country is truly fascinating and made me curious to join Italian-Pizza course. That was amazing for a short time, I could learn how to cook pizza, especially, when I realised that you have hired a well-known head chef from Italy who was professional in his job. The way, the chef taught me, showed me how simply, I can make a dough and cook pizza in a short time with some organic ingredients for my kids. I would like to admit that, now pizza is one of my main courses perhaps, two or three times a week.
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,
therefore
 , I would like to ask the possibility of holding
such
 that Italian class, but for Mexican food in the evening for busy housewives. I hope you could take steps to put in your priority and your consideration would be highly appreciated. Yours faithfully, Maryam Beik
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