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In the past, the main role of teachers was providing information. Today with various sources of information available to students, teachers have no role in modern education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Teachers used to play a great part that had array of serious responsibilities during the past,
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however according
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however, according
 to online sources or other ones, it could be seems that their roles have decreased. I fully disagree
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 statement which teachers have no appearance,
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 the reasons for my arguments are discussed in the following paragraphs. To commence with, it is obvious that the performance of pedagogue has decreased within contemporary resources which are acceptable to all of students whenever they want to access. It means that, the most of the students are able to be an autonomous learner. Having begun to be an acceptable range of sources, students preferred self-study learning method.
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, one of the most important roles of teachers that were providing date to children has lost its necessity.
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, thanks to supplement various materials, students can assimilate knowledge without teachers. Added to
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 is fashion information that children are able to expand their knowledge not their teacher’s old fashioned methods.
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 why, thanks to new sources of date or to access modern method the mission of teacher does not play a serious role aspect with the children. On the one hand,
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 there are different kinds of materials on the education system, but children need the teacher to learn and understand the sources.
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, the majority of students are unable marshal information when they write essays or other thing so due to cannot discriminate between source they may utilize wrong material on their exercise
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 circumstance may result in terrible consequences
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 as to get a low score from the exam.
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, even if they can use wide of date, resources are quite reliable that had been written via pedagogical experts.
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 most essential example is that teacher’s mission are not merely to provide information,
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 they guide children’s social life, their interactions with other classmates or child psychology for a certain period. For
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 reason, they play rather vital act in student’s
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 education life. To recapitulate, I completely believe that, even if the more technology develops and we have millions of different sources we always need teacher’s directions and their function never will disappear.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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