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A lot of people believe that the amount of violence shown on TV and in the cinema affects the actions of our young people and therefore increases the amount of violence in our society today. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? What can be done to reduce violence in our society today?

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The question of how the amount of
violence
 on
television
 and movies in our culture has influenced young people is something that cannot be quantified or proven. My opinion is that "yes, it has" is the answer. Today,
television
 and movies portray a great deal of
violence
, and while we seek to protect our young people from watching too much, they still have to see it.
Violence
 on the streets rose. That proved to be valid. The relation between the
television
 and the cinema
fascination
Suggestion
Fascination
 with
violence
 and the street
violence
 of today cannot be proven, but it
is
Suggestion
Is
 obvious that two are related. How do we minimize
violence
? It will be most helpful to be more vigilant about what age children are when they see
violence
 in
such
 media, and increase the age limit.
Moreover
,
Ministry
Suggestion
the Ministry
 of Education and Since is ought to pay more attention to psychologists working
at
Suggestion
in
 governmental schools by basing on the school students’ feedback. So I agree with the argument that the young people in our society are influenced by cinema and
television
 brutality. There are some things that can be done to change the situation but I wonder that anything is going to happen.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • desensitization
  • crucial stage
  • moral and ethical understandings
  • external factors
  • profound impact
  • reflection
  • mitigate
  • stricter regulations
  • depiction
  • empathy
  • conflict resolution
  • collaboration
  • conscious
  • impact
  • promoting
  • culture of peace
  • non-violence
  • public awareness campaigns
  • community programs
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