The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in Canada. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in Canada.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart gives information about the proportion of places visited by three different groups of
people
in
Canada
.
Overall
, what stands out from the chart is that those who are either from English-speaking
countries
or born in
Canada
prefers
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going cinema
while
migrants from other
countries
tend to visit
library
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the library
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. For all groups, the least favourite place is
theatre
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. In terms of cinema, 70% of the local Canadians go to the cinema , which is a fifth higher than the new migrants from other
countries
.
This
is followed by the new migrants from English - speaking
countries
about 65%. As we can see at
theatre
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,
this
place is unpopular in
Canada
with a minority of
people
from other
countries
visiting here which is just
a
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half of Canadian theatre-goers .
Similar
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A similar
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pattern can be seen in
zoo
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a zoo
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, most of the visitors are from English-speaking nations and
original
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Canada
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with 50% and 42% respectively
while
those
who
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from other nations occupy
for
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35% of the total visitors
Library
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is the
second
place that
people
from other
countries
go to.
It is clear that
a little more than half of new
migrates
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born in other
countries
choose
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the library
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library
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libraries
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to spend their time,
while
40% of English-speaking
migrates
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and 35% of
people
born in
Canada
like to spend their time in
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the library
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library
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libraries
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, canada, countries, library with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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