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Paln a below show health center in 2005 .paln b show the same place in present day.

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The given image
represent
Suggestion
represents
 an overall change of
health
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 from 2005 until present day.
First
 of all a hung change that can be observed is the size of the parking lot and the garden.
they
Suggestion
They
 cut off lots of space of
garden
Suggestion
the garden
 to
given
Suggestion
give
 more room for the parking which is now
thity
being ten more than twenty
thirty
 spaces comparing to twelve spaces
perviously
at an earlier time or formerly
previously
.
Furthermore
, we can see that the
health
center now is
Suggestion
centre is now
centre now is
 providing more consultant room to meet the needs of
partinents
a person who requires medical care
patients
 and one operations rooms which is located on the left side of physiotherapy room.
another
Suggestion
Another
 added place
to
Suggestion
in
 the centre is the children's play area.
it
Suggestion
It
 is placed in front of
reception desk
Suggestion
the reception desk
a reception desk
.
Accept space
.
behind
Suggestion
Behind
 the entrance on the left side of
health
Suggestion
a health centre
health centre
the health centre
health centres
center
 in order that the receptionist can look out for children while they play. To sum up, the
health
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 has changed a ton
,
Accept space
,
 providing more services and the environment is more spacious. So significant variation has been recorded.
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