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Governments are prohibiting the underage children from getting full-time jobs in certain countries. Do you agree or disagree?

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Hiring minors for full time jobs is deemed as illegal in many countries. In my Opinion,
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 is a step taken in a right direction by authorities to protect the right to
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 to avoid exploitation faced in the name of child labour. Reasons for not legalizing kids working full-time jobs are to make sure every child gets to complete proper
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education keeping
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education, keeping
 the future of the society in mind.
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,
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 step will ensure that children's rights are secured, by not allowing them to work for low wages, under harsh environments and susceptible to abuse.
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, the most important reason behind
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 is to reduce school dropout rate, it is noticed that that many kids coming from below the poverty level are becoming easy targets for industries to entice and leave
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 in middle for making quick money.
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 could
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 give rise to juvenile criminal activities, if they are not monitored and managed well. Another reason in favour of
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 step is employment opportunities in early stage means, they don’t peruse higher
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 or complete mandatory
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 which in turn deprives them
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 getting a better job and improving their standard of life and the cycle will continue for the generations to come.
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 could severely impact the standard and economy of any country and
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 may lead to poverty at soaring level. To sum it up, considering the disadvantages that presents when jobs are provided at the cost of completing
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, the steps taken by many countries to protect the future of young population will prove to be beneficial in long term

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