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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In these days, many people are able to dwell in different countries, regardless of their nationalities or speaking capabilities by development of technology. In line with
this
 trend, many people wish to live in overseas countries and several people are currently living.
Nevertheless
, some people believe that there exist severe social troubles and practical problems if we reside foreign land. From my point of view, the people who must speak in another country’s language definitely will experience a lot of problems. In
this
 essay, the reason will be discussed why I totally agree with
this
 idea. There are two main reasons why people who live in another country will undergo numerous troubles.
First
 of all, they will encounter the difficulty that they cannot obtain an occupation until speaking the local tongue smoothly. It is irrefutable fact that no one hire the people who do not speak in the local language, even if they have a good capability.
Hence
, they have to spend their time and money on learning the word.
As a result
, during the period when they study the tongue, they cannot get any job. Another point is that it is clearly arduous to make a new friend. In fact, the local people speak only using their language.
Therefore
, if a newcomer cannot use the word, the person will experience extreme isolation.
For example
, Carlos Tevez, who was absolutely famous and great soccer player in Argentina and England. In 2016, he moved from an Italian team to a Chinese team.
However
, he did not speak Chinese even simple greeting.
As a result
, he could not mingle with the other colleagues and he felt homesickness.
Likewise
, many people
also
 can undergo
this
 kind of situation. In conclusion, from my perspective, people who prepare to emigrate can encounter lots of problems.
First thing
Suggestion
The first thing
 is the difficulty of obtaining a job.
Secondly
, they can be isolated.
Thus
, they have to consider to migrate prudently.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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