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Rich countries should allow jobs for skilled and knowledgeable employees who are from poor countries. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is an undeniable fact that affluent countries are enriched in resources and in dire need of migration for the economic development.
Nonetheless
, Prosper nations should take an obligation to help the people of poor nations who are conquering with poverty and destitute needs.
However
, few voices arise from time to time against
this
 as it impacts host nation resources and increase job competition on their own land. I would prefer to be in the favour of helping the poor and needy skilled migrants. Needless to say, Some continents have less population and tremendously efficient amount of resources as compared to underdeveloped countries, so there is negligible risk if any aid is given.
In addition
 to
this
, Developed countries
also needs
Suggestion
also need
 skilled workers who can help in the country's prosperity and increase their workforce ability. To illustrate, USA, Canada, Australia and New Zealand are highly depending on foreign workers for running their industries and remain stable in international market. Undoubtedly, Migration of experienced community is essential for both the parties as one needs money and other needs work.
On the contrary
, Small portion of society thinks that
this
 exchange of services has a bad effect for their own community and its not a good choice to share job opportunities. In they opine, it will gradually increase competition and the impact on future generation while
also
 degrading the quality standards of any service due to different cultural and educational backgrounds.
For instance
, According to the study published in Forbes 2011, lot of immigrant doctors failed in the exam in comparison with host nation's doctors, which was carried to test the knowledge level of country wide doctors. So, Sometimes it's must do a background check in well versed manner to get benefitted mutually. To recapitulate, Issues like poverty and limited no of employees can only be handled with joint efforts. Under Developed parts can only be developed with the helping hand of people who have ample amount of richness and wellness. I would like to say, We can kill two birds with one stone and we should be generous towards world needy humans and bring qualified ones to meet both ends.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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