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In today's world, private companies rather than government pay for and conduct most scientific research. Do you think the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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These days,
private
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the private
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sectors
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sector
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tend
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 to pay for and
doing
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 scientific research rather than
public
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the public
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sectors
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sector
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.
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 it is undeniable that it brings a number of advantages, I believe that it does more harm than good. On the one hand, there will be a number of advantages if private companies investigate scientific research.
It is clear that
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 almost
private
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 enterprises can adapt to all necessary elements for
researching
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research
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. Because they are independent
on
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of
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 finance, they can supply the
state –of-the-art
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state–of–the–art
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 equipment for consulting.
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, I personally claim that the drawbacks outweigh the benefits when
private
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the private
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sectors
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sector
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carry
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 out scientific research. First of all, working for the government is the way to take
the
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apply
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responsibility
to
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for
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 society. Since all results are used for the public, scientific workers can contribute to developing their nation.
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, when the country is facing
with
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the
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an
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 epidemic, experimentation is needed before
spreading
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it spreads
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 widely. If researchers worked in
public
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the public
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sectors
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sector
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, they would have a chance to devote
to
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themselves to
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 the community.
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, there are a lot of opportunities for scientists
in learning
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to learn
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 when they work as public workers. Because of being a member of
governmental
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government
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 companies, civil researchers are able to travel or study
in
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abroad.
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, they have a lot of chances to meet,
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 friends with other researchers in the world. Thanks to that, they can acknowledge as much valuable experience. In conclusion, even though there are a great deal of great assets when private enterprises investigate scientific exploration, I think that the cons outweigh the pros

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientific research
  • private sector
  • government funding
  • technological innovation
  • competitive nature
  • profitable outcomes
  • conflict of interest
  • corporate bias
  • economic stimulation
  • public interest
  • non-profitable
  • public welfare
  • commercial applications
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