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With an increasing number of people eating fast food , which if eating fast food too regularly can cause health issues, some people that the only solution is to ban it completely .

These days health problems are caused by frequent consumption of fast
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 and the only way to deal with the problem is prohibit
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 meal. It does not seem unreasonable to suggest that individuals have the right to consume everything. On the one hand, it is clear that junk cooking is full of fats, chemicals which make addictive and have very little nutrients.Fast foodstuff should be banned because it contributes to the health questions.Eating burgers and chips increase the risk of heart disease and sugary diabetes.
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, a young girl became paralysed after eating a chicken from KFC.Fast
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 needs to be taken away because it ruins human life.
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, the prevention of eating fast
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 will give an ineffective result because a lot of poor people and students often feed with junk meal as long as preparing
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 cuisine does not require much effort and much money.If there is no fast
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, a lot of people will suffer from famine, which causes serious illnesses related with to stomach and even would die.No one can prohibit people on buying fast
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 as long as it is not hazardous,
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nly overeating
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 meal will cause problems. There is no shadow of doubt that only consuming frequently results with big problems. In conclusion, the given topic considered to be one of the most nowadays serious issues. I suppose the government does not need forbid
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 cuisine just should control over the fast
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 industries.

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