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The number of people who are at the risk of serious health problems due to being overweight is increasing. What are the reasons for growth in the overweight people in the society. How can this problem be solved.

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It is a bitter truth that a lot of people suffering with excruciating health issues
such
 as high blood pressure and cholesterol are increasing due to obesity. There are myriad reasons behind
this
 deplorable trend.
This
 essay will discuss the most important causes and propose some suggestions to overcome
this
 trend. To commence with, one of the main causes of obesity among people is their poor eating habits because the majority of people prefer junk
food
 over healthy. A number of fast
food
 restaurants are available at the corner of nearly all high streets.
Secondly
, the
weight
 increases when people eat more calories than they burn through activities.
This
 imbalance is the major contributor to the
weight
 gain.
For example
, nowadays many jobs are sitting and demand mental work rather than physical.
As a result
, usually
such
 people fail to follow a healthy lifestyle and gain their
weight
.
Additionally
, Studies have found that the people who sleep less are more vulnerable to be obese due to the release of hormones that controls appetite and the body's use of energy.
On the other hand
, it is important that action is taken to combat
this
 problem. One possible solution is to follow a healthy and nutritious diet plan. It has proven that home cooked
food
 has more nutrients as compare to market and processed
food
. So a healthy home cooked
food
 can keep the body healthy. Taking Japan as an example, Japanese people live longer because of their healthy eating habits. Another solution that would contribute to
weight
 loss and fitness is
weight
 and strength training. These solutions can lead to a healthy society. In conclusion, there are several problems associated with obesity, but solutions are
also
 there to combat the problem. A healthy lifestyle and physical training can reduce the number of obese people.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Obesity
  • Processed foods
  • Caloric intake
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Nutritional education
  • Metabolic rate
  • Physical inactivity
  • Dietary habits
  • Health literacy
  • Psychological well-being
  • Chronic diseases
  • Body mass index (BMI)
  • Lifestyle modifications
  • Preventive measures
  • Healthcare interventions
  • Food deserts
  • Portion control
  • Weight management
  • Exercise regimen
  • Public health policy
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