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Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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Advertisement
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 is one of the sources of
product
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 knowledge. It will give information to
customer
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 to ship the
product
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 from the market. Newly exhibit is always encouraging
customer
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 to know about the features of the things. From my point of view,
advertisement
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 is always encouraging person to buy new things that will enhance their lifestyle.
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, may be differ from people prospective.
First
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 and foremost, advertising plays a major role in
customer
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 as well as consumer life. A person always interacts from advertising before purchasing any
product
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 from the market. Sometimes people do not want to
purchase
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product but
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a product, but
a product but
products but
 due to their newness and attractiveness, always prefer to
purchase
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.
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, my uncle was watching TV
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 2 weeks ago. He saw an
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 of Gear bicycle on TV.
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, they already have a bicycle, but due to new feature available. He prefers to
purchase
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 it.
On the other hand
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, some people
purchase
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 thing what they need. After watching different advertisements, a person decides what kind of
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 suitable for his/her like Roti automaker, Chopper and mixer grinder. A lot of the public
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also think
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also thinks
 before
purchase
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, how the
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 beneficial to them in terms of Comfort, easiness and much more.
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, my mother suffering from arthritis disease from
last
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 10 years. She is trying to find better quality of
product
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 that relief her from pain. After Watching Tv
advertisement
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, she finds the best quality of a commodity which gives a lot of relief to her. Taking all the points into consideration, it concludes that
advertisement
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 most of the time influence the
customer
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 to
purchase
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 new things in the market.
However
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, it may be differ from different personage group.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • persuade
  • manipulative
  • unnecessary
  • excessive
  • artificial needs
  • desires
  • consumers
  • oversaturation
  • impulse buying
  • financial problems
  • inform
  • educate
  • features
  • benefits
  • innovations
  • raise awareness
  • social issues
  • positive behavior
  • enrich
  • well-being
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