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There are benefits to studying abroad, at least for part of one’s higher education. All students should try to include at least one year of a study-abroad program in their university or college education.

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Competition in jobs has significantly increased;
however
, some people say that studying abroad is more beneficial for future work, especially, exchange students will have more advantages because they can learn in abord and home country universities after graduating will get a duo degree that will add value for fresh grad. I strongly agree with
this
 arrangement that will have more opportunities for fresh
grad
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To begin
 with, several large companies need employees who are more talented in many ways like communication
skills
, language
skills
, or computer
skills
, which is affected by the decision to select them.
Therefore
, numerous universities created the curriculum for the modern era;
in particular
, the " duo degree" guarantees that one will have a certificate from a university in national and foreign countries as well and will have more chances in future work and earnings.
For instance
, a university in Thailand created an international program that teaches in Thailand during the first year to prepare knowledge and the second third year study in Australia and back to Thailand
last
 year so
this
 makes interested with students and parents who have perspectives with beneficial study abroad.
Furthermore
, it can save time to spend educational that learn four years but gain more experience in both countries, so it doesn't have to choose only one country. A student who is exchanged in another nation will have language
skills
 more than students who study in the country,
hence
 it can make companies create an image and credibility for the company that there are capable people in the organization,
in addition
, most of them easily adapt to new societies owing to their have experience with international society.
To sum up
, a double degree from an international university or college will give me more opportunities for future work because it can make a great statement that can show the experience and
skills
 in demand for several large offices.
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structure
Ensure a clearer distinction between the introduction and conclusion. The conclusion should succinctly summarize key points and restate your position.
language
Improve sentence structure for better clarity. Use transition words like 'firstly', 'additionally', and 'moreover' to guide the reader through your argument.
content
While your main points are supported, provide further elaboration on examples to strengthen their relevance to the argument.
content
Great job in addressing the benefits of studying abroad for both personal and professional development.
content
You used relevant examples to illustrate the advantages of a dual degree program, which effectively supported your argument.
language
Your stance on the topic is clear with a consistent argument throughout the essay.

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