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Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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Advertisement
 is one of the sources of
product
 knowledge. It will give information to
customer
 to ship the
product
 from the market. Newly
advertisement
 is always encouraging
customer
 to know about the future of the things. From my point of view,
Advertisement
 is always encouraging person to buy new things that will better their lifestyle.
However
, may be differ from people prospective.
First
 and foremost, advertising plays a major role in
customer
 as well as consumer life. A person always interacts from advertising before purchasing any
product
 from the market. Sometimes people's don't want to
purchase
product but
Suggestion
a product, but
a product but
products but
 due to their newness and attractiveness, always prefer to
purchase
.
For instance
, My uncle watching TV
last
 2 weeks ago. He saw an
advertisement
 of Gear bicycle on TV.
Although
, they already have a bicycle, but due to new feature available. He prefers to
purchase
 it.
On the other hand
, some people
purchase
 thing what they need. After watching different advertisements, a person decides what kind of
product
 suitable for his/her like Roti automaker, Chopper and mixer grinder. A lot of the public
also think
Suggestion
also thinks
 before
purchase
, how the
product
 beneficial to them in terms of Comfort, easiness and much more.
For example
, My mother suffering from arthritis disease from
last
 10 years. She is trying to find better quality of
product
 that relief her from pain. After Watching Dr.
Ortho
advertisement
 she finds the best quality of
product
 and that gives relief a lot to her. Taking all the points into consideration, it concludes that
advertisement
 most of the time influence the
customer
 to
purchase
 new things in the market.
However
, it may be differ from different personage group.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • persuade
  • manipulative
  • unnecessary
  • excessive
  • artificial needs
  • desires
  • consumers
  • oversaturation
  • impulse buying
  • financial problems
  • inform
  • educate
  • features
  • benefits
  • innovations
  • raise awareness
  • social issues
  • positive behavior
  • enrich
  • well-being
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