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IELTS 13 - Exam 1 - Writing Task 2 Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Living in a different
country
 with a
language
that is
 not the same as your native tongue could be very challenging, but
also
 it can open many opportunities in our development as
individual
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individuals
an individual
. It is true that it could cause some difficult situations in our social life, but in the
process we
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process, we
 increase our abilities to communicate, socialize and
in
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at
 the end these are important skills in our
proffesional
engaged in a profession or engaging in as a profession or means of livelihood
professional
 curriculum. People who study or live in a different
country
 they return to their homeland are very respected and have more career
oportunities
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
 than
other candidates
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the other candidates
 that haven´t travelled before, or even to those who lived in a different
country
 but their
language
 are the same.
For example
, two
prospect
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prospects
 for a a job vacancy with the same curriculum, the one who lived in a
country
 that had to speak in a different
language
 has more chances to be elected for the job. Living in a nation with a different native tongue demands to excel in our capacities to adapt. It requires hours of study and be constantly searching for different ways to
comunicate
transmit information
communicate
 properly. It’s true that, in some situations, it could cause some social problems, but with the proper help and the support of friends, classmates or work colleagues every challenge can be overcome. In
conclutions
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
conclusions
consolation
, even when living in a
country
 where you have to speak a foreign
language
 can cause some problems, I believe
that is
 very positive and people
should be encourage
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should be encouraged
 to experience it almost one time in their life.
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