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Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to. What can tourists do to reduce the harmful effects of tourism on local cultures and environments?

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In developed and developing countries, where have many beautiful places so they can appeal to tourists go to visit or
travel
.
However
, when too many people go there, it will cause some harmful effects. I believe that people should recognize the negative problems of
travel
. There is no denying that, tourism has contributed a lot of economic benefits to the nation.
Nevertheless
, the tourism industry
also
 affects the surrounding environment, which mainly by tourists. Some people thought that they don’t have to improve or protect the place where they went to
travel
. By the rising number of travele
rs in tha
a person who changes location
travellers
t area, it leads to an increase in waste that tourists leave in there.
Therefore
, the best way can solve
this
 problem is the law of the environment should be promulgated to influence tourists or local people who exploit tourism to make a profit.
For example
, when I was 15 years old, my family went to Can Gio Beach and
that is
 my worst memory. I have never seen a place so full of rubbish that I did not dare to swim or play on the beach.
However
, the local government has enacted environmental protection regulations, which impose fines on acts that pose a threat or cause environmental pollution to raise the awareness of visitors and residents there. After about 4 years, when I was 19 years old, I went back there again and realized that the environment had improved a lot. The beach is not much rubbish, tourists have increased. In conclusion,
travel
also
 has negative effects like environmental destruction or pollution.
On the other hand
, it can be surmounted by raising people's awareness of environmental protection.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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