Children can learn effectively by watching television. Therefore they should be encouraged to watch television regularly at home and at school. TO what extended do you agree or disagree?

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the child's eyes

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Grammar mistakes
 

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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