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Governments should spend more money on education than on recreation and sport. Do you agree or disagree?

#governments #money #education #recreation #sport
It is a highly debatable issue whether the government should spend money on
education
 or on entertaining and sports. In my
opinion I
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opinion, I
am totally agree
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totally agree
 with that; the government should give the
apriority
status established in order of importance or urgency
priority
 to the
education
.
Success
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Successful
education
 is very important for
countries
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countries'
country's
development
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developers
developer
. It is lead to have an excellent
economy
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economic
 system. Which gives the countries an opportunity to improve other fields
such
 as health care systems
,
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,
 commercial and manufacture. The countries
will provides
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will provide
 a huge
verity
a collection containing a variety of sorts of things
variety
 and excellent opportunity of jobs in different specialist.
that
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That
 will happen if they have a good
out comes
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outcome
outcomes
 from the
education
 system.
As a result
 of that, the salary of the employments will get higher and the
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
 will be more comfortable
moreover
 the productivity will contribute in other activity
such
 as the sport and recreation. To put it in a nutshell, I pen
down saying
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down, saying
 that
,
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,
education
 is essential
,
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,
necessary and basement of successful country.
that
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That
 leads in result to improve
other side
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the other side
 of society needed and entertainment.
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