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Some people say that in our modern age, it is unnecessary to teach children about the skills of handwriting. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is an undeniable fact that the
technology
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 and advancement in the present century changed the whole environment, including the child handwriting which was considered to be quintessential in past time. In the modern world, Almost 80% population of is using mobile phones, tablets and a computer which tremendously decreased the use of pen and paper. I partially agree with the statement and considered that handwriting skills are
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 important to some extent rather than becoming addict of chip devices.
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 of all, Science Invention and advance
technology
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 that have been done in previous decades compacted the whole world. The unbelievable advancement
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 computer devices and mobile immensely reduced the need of writing anything even in the classroom and kindergarten as student books and notebooks is being replaced with online keyboard assignments and e-books.
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, 97% adults who are working in the industry and teenagers in the USA are hardly writing
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 paragraph on paper in
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 month according to the survey of Forbes, 2011. So, From
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 prospect, it's proven that teaching good handwriting is a matter of previous century.
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, All kinds of devices rely on multifarious other factors
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 Internet, electricity and communication means which create additional dependency. Addition to
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, In case of failure of just
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 aspect of the
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 devices will compel us in the gloomy world of disability where nothing can be done for improvement. To illustrate
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, Assume a single day without a mobile phone, it's horrible to imagine because you will get disconnected from everyone and almost ineligible to do anything.
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, It's a necessity to learn
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technology but
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technology, but
 completely relying is the biggest mistake
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 being done by mankind of the contemporary years. To recapitulate, Everything in excess is dangerous and usage of
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 should keep limited to some extent. Undoubtedly, Science inventions made major changes and the ability to control over the entire planet, but we should not become dependent immensely on
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 technique.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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