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Should governments make decisions about people’s lifestyle, or should people make their own decisions?

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Some people think that decisions of people's Lifestyle should be made by governments, even though others believed
that is
 wrong, making decisions by people is better. It is a debatable issue in the modern society. I will discuss both viewpoints in the upcoming paragraphs. On the one hand, with the advent of globalisation, from older Era to recent years the lifestyle of the People changed a lot.
This
 cause, some issues are occurring,
such
 as who make the decisions about people's Lifestyle government or people own.
Firstly
, people posses own decisions to enjoy their lifestyle. It is considered that developing countries have no rights to interrupt in the individuals Life.
Furthermore
, individuals own involved and the desire for a better lifestyle is a key factor and driving force in self motivation and encouragement.
On the other hand
, the authorities have some responsibilities towards the People's Lifestyle.
Firstly
, the government must keep an eye on the habits of people like smoking, drinking and usage of drugs to ensure the existence of a peaceful society. These habits are
also
 affected for others, who lives among them.
Further
, if individual infringes the law, the authority will take legal actions.
Such
 as, alcohol drinkers, while they are driving and ignore to obey rules. The authority can seem strict fines.
Secondly
, the government can promote awareness campaigns in terms of Health and Lifestyle.
For instance
, schools in Japan are funded by food and health authorities to encourage their pupils to participate in various physical activities,
such
 as sports and gymnastics. In conclusion, the authority should make the decision of people's Lifestyle, but according to need, not unnecessary and people must appreciate
such
 lifestyles, don't hurt someones feelings about his culture.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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