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Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some people think that television has got a crucial importance for people who want to utilize it as an educational tool while others are of the opinion are using it irreparable harm. I think there is some truth in both views as well as reasons will be given below. We should recognise that TV is an extremely forceful device. I mean different channels illustrates several types of things
such
 as news report, movies, music and other types of broadcasts that can improve a person’s world-view.
Moreover
, If we want to promote one product, we can create one film and add the good in scenes of the film. If the movie is significantly popular over population, the company or person who created the product may earn a great deal of fund as well as the movie too.
On the other hand
, it has got harmful effect for children and even teenagers. The most negative aspect is gained from scenes of the fight, bloodthirstiness and brutality in the movie may show its influence on youngsters life. In many countries have a certain law as well as limit for broadcasting violent or obscene materials.
Nevertheless
, parents should verify what movies or programs are watched by their children or they should give them limit time to watch television. Based on different explained views, the solid conclusion can be drawn that taking advantage or disadvantage of watching TV depend on the person who watches it. In my personal opinion every country takes consideration into the demonstrated films together with broadcasts.
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