Nowadays, online shopping has become more popular while some people argue in-store shopping would be better.    To what extent do you agree?

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Many people prefer to buy their items from the internet
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to go to a shop.It is true that online shopping has a positive development
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of all, online shopping become so popular because it is easy to use and we can do shopping from our house standing in front of a laptop without not to be forced to go to a store.I think that can become very unhealthy because people forgot to socialise and to do physical activities and
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can lead to a sedentary life.
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negative factor of shopping online is that people are attract for many items
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clothes
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and tend to buy more than is
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needed in
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way people spend much money.
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kind of shopping can become like an addiction.
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Furthermore, the internet
is not the safest place to do shopping because is a small risk of getting financial information by hackers. Taking everything into consideration
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the negative overweigh the positive.
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