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People often do not interact with their neighbours and this is harming communities, what are the possible causes and solutions?

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In
this
 day and age, communication is the key to resolve conflict living modern society.
However
, it has greatly changed that more and more people do not have an interaction with their neighbourhoods and result in harming communities. In my perspective, I totally agree
this
 premise for several reasons.
First
 and foremost, due to many crime rate is continuously increasing, a number of people tend to avoid interacting with their neighbours.
For example
, statistically the report shows that the 85 proportion of people who have experienced noise in the floor used to feel uncomfortable, temper and annoying.
In addition
, those who have an argument, even go to the court. As a consequence, people suffering noise from their neighbours are more likely to make a situation, which means they could not be a good relationship with one another. What's more, if they become more serious situation, it could be led to a rise criminal behaviour
such
 as murder. It is really a sad that, but it has already happened in our lives.
In addition
, with the increasing spending of work, it would be lessened to talk each other.
For instance
, they may not have a different daily routine between neighbours. If neighbour commute at night shift, whereas, when I work at daytime in
this
 case, it might not meet very often. In order to improve interaction with their neighbours, police should strengthen the patrol around the city.
Furthermore
, if charitable organization were to provide some program for local residents like having a tea time and a book club, it would be a perfect way to reduce the lack of conversation together. In a nutshell, the community can sometimes offer more assistance than the government.
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