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Convenience food will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation. To what degree do you agree or disagree ?

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Pre prepared meal start to gain in front of traditional
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 and the way how is cooked.I agree with that because nowadays people are very busy and do not have time for cooking but even so I do not think that convenience
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 will replace traditional one. It is true that convenience meal is easy to prepare and people, especially women, tend to use
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 because of limited free time but traditional
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 is much healthier.For some people cooking is a veritable art life they cook with pleasure and I think
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 the one reason for which traditional
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 never disappear.
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 industry of
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 restaurant street catering is in increasing and development.There are many festivals of traditional
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 and many people sustain
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 seems to be preferred by many companies in their lunch break at the office.Special occasions like anniversary and weddings are marked by conventional
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.Nowadays people work all day long and do not have time to cook and
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 is very useful for them.In many supermarkets are o lot of dishes pre prepared like soup, meat and they are at a very good price too.I think that
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 kind of products can be very harmful for our health
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 can lead to obesity and other problems like heart disease
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diabetes, strokes, cancers.A pre packed
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 contains too much calories and additives. To conclude traditional
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 always will play an important role in our lives and never will disappear.People understand the importance of traditional
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 and how
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 can represent us like a nation.
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